.......The violent storm was……..
The wind howled loudly and the rain banged and spattered everywhere. The gooey mud squelched as the unfortunate dog walkers jumped from puddle to puddle. I was walking home when an alarm screeched stridently. As I looked through the windows of people’s houses I saw them sitting in their arm chairs watching television. The sound of the dogs howling the alarm going off all came together and I just wished I was at home. Getting home seemed like forever, but finally I got to my house. After the violent storm it led to bright sunshine…
I like the image you have created of the dog walkers!
ReplyDeleteSome excellent descriptions, well done.
I llike the bit where you said the the alarm screetched stridently, good job.
ReplyDeleteby Summer
You have used some good adgectives keep it up! Leah.
DeleteI think your work was really imaginative, so it's a thumbs up from me!
ReplyDeleteBy Anh...
I really like your second sentence but also your adjectives. Good job!!!
ReplyDeleteLettia B
I like your descriptions and I just really like it.
ReplyDeleteBy Talia
You used some brilliant adjectives and discribed the storm well.
ReplyDeleteLeah
You painted a really vivid picture here Romola, well done! I particularly enjoyed the part about the dog walkers jumping between puddles and squelching in the mud.
ReplyDeleteNicola (Team 100WC)