Saturday 1 February 2014

Paris #19

One frosty afternoon my mum, dad and I went to check out the new grand opening on the high street. It was a Mexican Restaurant, in the window of the restaurant was a funny looking, fluffy and pink gorilla it looked so, so funny. It made me and my mum laugh, even my dad laughed, well for a change. So we thought it was quite funky, so then I said, “Shall we go and have a little look inside?” So my mum and dad said, “Okay then.” So then we went in... All the tables and chairs were pink, it was an epic restaurant.

1 comment:

  1. Hello Paris,
    We really enjoyed the words you chose in your story. They are unusual and interesting because they are not boring or dull words. "Epic", "funky" and "frosty" are all great selections that make the story fun to read.
    We also enjoyed your piece because it was easy for us to connect with and understand. The girls relationship with her family seemed important to her. The part where they all laughed about the gorilla made us smile too.
    Perhaps using another word rather than 'so' would make the story more exciting. Reading the same word over and over can get kind of boring.
    There are not a lot of Mexican restaurants in our area. Whenever we all go out to eat as families many of ours choose to go to Mexican restaurant in a town 30 to 40 minutes from our homes.
    Ms. Felton and the Fantastic Fives
    West Harrison Elementary, Iowa USA
    http://kidblog.org/FeltonsFifth/

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