tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8192955641160035348.post3858311211754365139..comments2023-06-10T12:33:38.919+01:00Comments on 100 Word Challenge @ The Richmond School: ....as the flame flickered and then went out,,, by RhiannaDavid Ballhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07808890305733269826noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8192955641160035348.post-76997493248314973362016-05-29T22:17:55.702+01:002016-05-29T22:17:55.702+01:00Hello Rhianna,
I have been involved with many sch...Hello Rhianna,<br /><br />I have been involved with many school plays and performances over the years and know many strange things can happen. Your story shares an experience that could have been taken from the real world. I wonder how many others share your fear of the dark? It's not knowing what's out there that can make our minds imagine bad things. Well done.<br /><br />You have tried to take care with spelling and punctuation, a sign of your developing skills as a writer. Again, well done.<br /><br />My suggestion for your story comes from a section including the prompt phrase. Using the prompt, the flame had gone out yet you repeated the flame had gone out in another sentence. This is an error I have made as well. I find it helps if I reread my writing more than once so, hopefully, I can adjust before posting.<br /><br />You know how to tell an interesting story so I hope you can continue entering the 100WC and sharing your adventures. <br /><br />Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)<br />Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australiarmannellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10325881715643049499noreply@blogger.com