I was just checking that I had brought everything. I looked
at my watch and I was running late.
I opened the door and there in front of me
was golden steps with beautiful flowers. I stood there amazed but then I knew
that this was a lot better than my holiday. Quickly, I ran up the stairs and it
seemed to go on for ever but every time I went up a step it made a tune. Finally,
I reached the top and it lead me to the plane and I never knew if it was just a
dream.
Lovely story well done! I love the idea of a stairs that plays a tune. Well done for using capital letters and full stops. Keep up the good writing.
ReplyDeleteAnne Marie Kealy
St Rose's NS
Dublin
Hello Jessica,
ReplyDeleteDreams can take us to so many amazing places our real world can't. It seems this was your experience as you ascended a stairway into the sky. Welld one.
Your growing skills as a writer are shown by the care you have taken with spelling and punctuation. My only suggestion would be a minor one where you used "the plane". As we don't know anything about a plane until the last sentence, "a plane" would have been used. Again, well done!
I hope you can continue entering the 100WC. Good writers need to share their adevntures with others.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia