There was a young girl called Belle she loved to play with
her pet dog Bubbles. One bright summer day Belle set of on a journey to find
her lost mum that had been lost for 2 months. As she was walking slowly through
the dark gloomy woods she saw a flash the light was SO bright that it startled
her. She decided to follow the light because she thought it might lead her to
her mum. She didn't realise that it was so far away from her so she took a nap.
When she woke up she was in a dark tall tomb…
I think the way you describe Belle's journey you let the reader know how Belle's mood and surroundings are changing. For example you begin by describing it with adjectives like 'bright', but then move to words like 'gloomy' and 'dark'. This helped me to relate to Belle and understand how she was feeling. Great work- well done.
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