There was a lady who lived in enchanted forest, nobody believed in her or liked her. But she wanted to prove them all wrong. So the following morning she crept out of the enchanted forest in to the open world. When she reached the park there was strange giant towering above her. When she had arrived at a tree stump she tripped over some bird feed and when she looked up she saw a dark black crow leaning towards her. It flew and pushed her. What was it going to do next? And where was the bird going to take her?
Hi Caitlin,
ReplyDeleteI loved the way you left your audience wondering about what was going to happen to the lady... this is definitely a story you could develop into a longer piece of writing. I can see that this lady is about to embark on a quest to prove everyone they were wrong about her! I think one of the reasons why I enjoyed your story is that you created a clear picture for your reader, through your use of precise and descriptive vocabulary, well done!
Thank you for sharing your work with us, I hope to read more from you in the future.
Mrs Pratt (Team 100WC)