I was sitting on my chair one day in summer, when I realised, I was hungry. I sprinted downstairs and went into the cupboard where the bread was, I needed my PB&J sandwich. Then something awful happened...
I looked at my hand because usually I have the instructions on there, but I must've washed my hand because they were gone.
"NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!"
I ran upstairs quickly and sat on my floor. I pulled a big black case out from under my bed and looked inside. There they were, the spare instructions that my mum had written. I started looking at them, but I didn't understand the instructions...
Hi Grace,
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story!
First of all, you picked a very relatable topic; I think all of us have been in a situation where we are desperate for a PB & J sandwich!
I also think that you used the prompt in quite an imaginative way- sadly the back-up instructions were just not as good!
Finally, I would like to mention that that your writing was of a very high standard! Using speech marks (""), ellipses (...) and capital letters (e.g. ABC) to show shouting are all very clever techniques!
Keep on writing!
Ana, Team 100WC, Oxford, England