Saturday 7 June 2014

100WC#35 by Lewis

"Hurry the black smoke is catching us up!" Shouted Tom. Tom and his friend Dave somehow travelled to a magical world. They kept running and running until they found a magical gateway that took them home.

"Finally we found it.....THE GATEWAY HOME!" said Dave happily. Tom and Dave went through the magical gateway, but then they found there was a furious wind and rain storm at their home town. They were so cold so they rushed to Tom's house. They were so bored when they got home, they wished they could go back to that magical and mysterious world because it was never boring there!

1 comment:

  1. I'm not sure I'd ever be as bored as Tom and Dave and *want* to go back to the magical realm Lewis; sounded rather scary to me! You've used some good vocabulary here to make your story richer and more readable - "mysterious" and "furious" for example. Good punctuation too.
    Well done and keep rising to the Challenge.

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