I was swimming for an hour non-stop so I decided to have a lie down on my sunbed. Ah! So relaxing! The view from where I was laid is amazing. People having a row and people making sticky sweets. The squawking seagulls getting ready to fly. I am now ready to have a snack. Chips or a chicken burger? I’ll go with the chips option “Waiter! Waiter! Can I have some chips please?”
“Yes certainly madam! I’ll get them straight away!” With that he was gone!
After a few minutes he came back! They were delicious! Lovely and fluffy!
Kirsten the setting of your story sounds so lovely and what great descriptive writing; "squawking" seagulls, not just seagulls - great work! Adding some detail like that with an extra word makes your story very fun to read. And the chips sound delicious too!
ReplyDeleteI like your idea for the entire writing piece. I like how you used some nice descriptive words but maybe next time when you write a piece keep it in either present or past tense.
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