Saturday, 12 March 2016

Statues by Finley

There was 3 men staying as still as stone in the middle of the street. These men were wearing silver robes and talking to each other about what they were doing tomorrow. Charlie said, “Riding a Raptor.”
Joe said, “Feeding a T-Rex.”
James said, “Doing a show with the Mosasaurus.”
They were all working at the local park.

The next day they went to the local park and started doing their jobs. In the forest there was a problem no one was there, all of the dinosaurs were free. Joe, James and Charlie were all scared …..

1 comment:

  1. Hello Finley,

    You have a creative imagination and I suspect you also like learning about dinosaurs. I could imagine the scene of raptors and a T-Rex roaming the park while a mosasaur swam in a large pond or lake in the park. Like the three men, I would also be scared in your “Jurassic Park” style adventure.

    You have tried to use correct spelling and punctuation in your writing demonstrating your growing skills in writing. You have used speech effectively with my suggestion being to possibly take a new line as Charlie spoke as you had for Joe and James. Well done.

    I hope you can continue entering the 100WC and sharing your adventures. Imagination and its adventures should be shared.

    Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
    Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia