Friday 6 December 2013

...and the noise stopped... by Lewis

And then the noise stopped...
"Did you hear that ferocious noise?  My ears hurt so much!"

"Do you want to explore?" They decided to have a look around and went to the kitchen.  They didn't find anything that could have made such a terrible noise.  After that they decided to look in the attic to see if it was an owl or some sort of animal that could have come in through the attic window that Dad sometimes opened, they found nothing.  Then they went to look in the living room to see if it was their dog Paddy, it was, she had had puppies.

1 comment:

  1. Hello Lewis,
    Your piece is uniquely original. The concept of your story is a fresh and welcome diversion from other more obvious ideas.
    Be aware of your sentence structure when you are crafting a story. Try not to combine sentences in order to avoid run-ons.
    How very exciting that Paddy had puppies! Puppies are so much fun to play with. I hope your characters had many adventures with Paddy and the puppies.
    Thank you for sharing your thoughts,
    Gina Felton Team 100: Iowa, USA

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