Boom!!! The sound was horrendous, as next doors house was
under flames. Crying and screaming, then suddenly, the noise stopped.
Quickly after, the sound was followed by the noise of an
engine. Horrible cries of pain still rang in my ears. My mum told me to stay
calm, and to stay with the people who were lucky to get out. One of our neighbours
(who was in the fire) told us how horrible it was. At the end, I was in tears
as the people were gone in the ambulance. I felt really bad, as they left.
This is a dramatic extract that uses the prompt really well. You have some thoughtful ideas and I really liked the way the tension continued throughout. Keep writing, well done Lettia!
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