Then the noise stopped all of a sudden out came a clown it
scared John to death he had a mini heart attack his friend Michael set the trap
up to scare John because on Halloween John scared Michael to death so today was
his pay back day they always do it so it is not an big issue and plus they like
doing it. But I can guarantee one day they will both have a heart attack some
day of the week and possibly die in my opinion but I doubt they will have a
heart attack. But Michael and John never fell out.
Ruby I liked that the two boys were playing pranks on each other, and that they stayed friends no matter what. However, I think your story could use a few punctuation marks to divide out each individual idea. Sometimes writers use run on sentences to cause a sense of the character being frantic or confused, but since they are grammatically incorrect you have to use them sparingly. This was a very creative story keep up the good work!
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