Today is the day that my uncle comes to see me, he said he
would bring me a fabulous present I wonder what it will be. I was watching TV when I heard a knock on the
back door and I know who it is. I jumped up from my sofa and ran to the back
door and I could see my uncle. I let him in and he said, “Here is your present.”
I looked at him and smiled. I took the present out of his hand and opened it
but when I put the batteries in it broke.
Hello Sarah,
ReplyDeleteIt's always exciting waiting for a surprise. I received a special charm for my Pandora bracelet from my three nephews yesterday. They hadn't been able to visit over Christmas because of the bad weather.
I would like to share a little tip with you that I love to use to vary how I start each sentence. Sometimes when I read my writing, I notice that I have started all of my sentences in the same way. This is a simple tip to make sure each sentence begins in a different manner.
ED-ING-LY
-Ed start a sentence with an -ed word.
Shocked, she ran, opened the door and ran.
-ing start a sentence with an -ing word
Falling she put up her arms in order to grab onto a passing branch.
-ly start a sentence with a -ly word
Nervously, the mouse edged its way forward until his whole body was peeking out from its hole.
Keep writing.
Ms R. Orr
Head Teacher
Team 100WC