After I came from a hard working day at school my parents gave me some sponge cake and poured some custard on. The sponge was delicious but the custard tasted magnificent I just wanted more and more and more! I kept begging for some but they just said no you can have some tomorrow after school and it is time for bed. “Bed!” I said looking at both of my parents. My mum was pointing up the stairs.
“But I .. “
“No buts you are going to bed and that’s that.” There was something wrong very wrong indeed.
Hello Talia,
ReplyDeleteIf I remember rightly, the prompt was '.... the custard tasted like ....' , however, I do like how you have included the word magnificent in your writing.
You have used a great time connective to start your writing. Please take time to review your second sentence as the punctuation could be improved here.
Keep writing.
Ms R. Orr
Head Teacher
Team100