Dear Diary, 22/01/14
Today is the day after my birthday. I woke up at exactly 7:44.
As I ran down the stairs my heart was full of joy. Mum, dad, Hollie and Alfie
followed me down I went straight to the living room and inside were about 50
presents all wrapped up addressed to me. A smile rose upon my face I jumped up
and down screaming. Dad said to open his present first I ran to it and ripped
it open inside was a Furby my no.1 present …but when he put the batteries in...
it shouted, “happy birthday!”
Well done, Summer.
ReplyDeleteGood, clear writing with some interesting details. Your sentences are well organised and you begin them in a range of ways.
Keep up the good work!