Wednesday 30 October 2013

Millie O 100 Word Challenge #9

One early morning I woke up after having a tremendous night it was thundering and lightning like it never had before. It was banging and crashing I was petrified. Later on that day it got perilous and lost control. Suddenly the wind turned in to a massive hurricane. The lightning struck! Everyone was terrified you could tell by the look on their faces. Finally I went to sleep and CRASH the tree had fell down and I nearly got blown away. In the end the violent storm calmed down it was so close that the house didn't blow down, phew!

3 comments:

  1. Good use of perilous and petrified.
    Should it be fell or fallen?

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  2. Well done Millie, you have used some very adventurous language here. To improve it even further could you use some commas in your sentences? Keep up the good writing!
    Lisa Team 100WC

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