The Violent storm.
The violent storm was a misty storm, there were cars getting crushed because the trees were blowing over. Nobody could get to sleep in the cottage. Everybody was running away especially the women with their children! The grey clouds were giving me nightmares…The people who lived next door from me their roof was dinted, then we packed our cases and went to make a shelter. We lived near the shore were all the ships was coming in making a terrible noise. It was only raining gently it was strange because it was a big terrible storm.
Well done Paris. A good mixture of sentence types / lengths and mostly punctuated correctly.
ReplyDeleteCheck: where / were was / were
Hi Paris,
ReplyDeleteI love your description here. I can really picture being in this horrible storm.
Please try to check that your writing makes sense - have a look at the sentence 'The people who lived next door...' What do you notice?
Keep up the great work,
Mr Connor
Team 100wc