Insects crawl up of off the ground as a Lego figure walks over it. The beasts jump up and nearly give the figure a heart-attack before running away like it's never happened. The figure ran away screaming like a girl who’s falling off a building. When he got home, he got a weapon and started to find the creatures one by one. He started in the forest, he saw them and then shot the heck out of most of them. He then found a nest full of them and he blew that up. Then he went home to chill.
Saturday, 27 October 2018
Crawlers by Mason
Insects crawl up of off the ground as a Lego figure walks over it. The beasts jump up and nearly give the figure a heart-attack before running away like it's never happened. The figure ran away screaming like a girl who’s falling off a building. When he got home, he got a weapon and started to find the creatures one by one. He started in the forest, he saw them and then shot the heck out of most of them. He then found a nest full of them and he blew that up. Then he went home to chill.
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Hi Mason,
ReplyDeleteWell done for responding to the 100 Word Challenge prompt. I really liked the introduction your piece, the idea of the shock nearly inducing a heart attack was very descriptive of the mood of the character.
As a teacher I was impressed with you using a simile to describe how the character was screaming however, as a girl, I was not impressed with the simile!! How do you know girls scream when they fall off buildings? How do you know boys don't scream when they fall off buildings??
I found it interesting that your character's bravery was linked to a weapon, I like to think of strong characters finding bravery from within, instead of having to resort to violence to lose their fear.
Keep up the writing, I will be looking forward to seeing your next 100 Word Challenge!
Ciara (Team 100)
Wicklow, Ireland