Sunday 8 March 2015

PIPE SWAM GREEN CAREFULLY HORSE by Sophia

The small buckle fell to the ground and down the green pipe. The buckle was supposed to hold the saddle to the horse and so this caused the rider to fall off and fall to the ground. Meanwhile, the buckle floated along the pipe and clean water swam behind it pushing it along.

The rider could not afford a new saddle so she needed to get the buckle removed from the drain pipe immediately before it was pushed any further and was lost forever. Panicking, the rider stuck her hand into the narrow pipe and carefully pulled the buckle out.

19 comments:

  1. Good description but I could not quite get the story.

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  3. Good description but I could not quite get the story.
    Sam B

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  4. Great story Sophia, I really like the description and detail that you have put in. by Jemima

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  5. Well done you story is very interesting. I like the story a lot. You have used quite a lot of description.
    By Jessica

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  7. This story is very interesting and you have used a lot of description.
    By Eleanor

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  8. I liked your story ideas and you had good description.
    Will J

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  9. I like your story and you have done a lot of description keep it up Sophia. By Demi

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  10. Very good Sophia keep it up with your typing skills in English.

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  11. Well done by Madison good description

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  12. I really like your story but some I didn't get some of it. Rose K

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  13. I really enjoyed reading your 100 WC it was really good I hope others read it too! I loved how you used punctuation and how you put a lot of hard work into this. But it was a bit strange!
    By Morgan

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  14. I like your story and you have done a lot of description keep it up Sophia. By Demi

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  15. Very good Sophia keep it up with your typing skills in English.
    By/Courtneychallis

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  16. I like the story Sophia. Maybe you should give the horse rider a name so you don't have to keep saying the rider.
    Maddie T

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  17. Thanks for the input and advice I will listen to it
    Sophia

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  18. I like the story soph
    Lily

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  19. Keep up the good work Sophia I can't wait to read your next 100 word challenge#

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