Saturday 30 November 2013

Lili 100WC#13

Quick run!!! Its her, what who, what the hell are you talking about its that girl she tries to kill people ok let’s just get out of here, run she’s chasing us she’s a evil human / spirit I’m grabbing my car and getting out of here no get back see you later I’m leaving you here. I’m going to run for my life and I’ve got away I hope my friend feels sorry for me I just bet he misses me loads I’m just going to see him but I really miss him.

1 comment:

  1. Oh, I loved the energy in your story but I think you need a little more punctuation to help the reader know what sentence is what. The frantic pace of your writing helps build the tension for the story though.

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