As Dave and Angela turned to run away, they heard a voice
shout out, “Heeeelllppp!”
They stopped and looked at each other and turned back
towards the scary house. They walked
slowly back and opened the creaky front door shouting, “Hellooo!”
Dave whispered to Angela, “He must be hurt maybe the stories
we’ve heard about him aren’t true.” Angela said “Well I think we should be very
careful.”
“Help,” they heard
the voice again, they walked through the house to the room where they heard the
noise, they opened the door and there was a blinding flash of light. Arrrrrgggghhhhh!
A very good effort Summer. You have made a good attempt at punctuating your dialogue correctly. You have built up the story well and then left the reader wanting to know what happens next!
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