Today, the school kids were very excited, this was because of the
eclipse which was happening quite soon. One of the girls shouted “Look up! Can
you see?”
“Yes!!” Another replied. Indeed, they were talking about the eclipse. It
had come,… And so quickly. Suddenly everything went dark, as the sun hid behind
complete darkness. But within a couple of minutes, it was all over.
The children groaned and sighed, some of them even remarked “Oh! It’s
done,” and they ran off into the classroom, leaving the sun to recover. The
others, well…
Hi Lettia,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your writing, I liked the way you left it, leaving the reader wondering. The short sentence 'It had come' works well and I like the idea of the sun hiding behind complete darkness. You've chosen some good describing words too. Have you done the 100 Word Challenge before? Its been our first attempt this week, we're looking forward to the new prompt.
Miss Williams, Teaching Assistant
Class 11, Hopwood C P School, England
Hi Lettia,
ReplyDeleteI love the idea that the sun needs to recover from an eclipse! That is funny!
Thank you for participating in the 100WC! Keep writing!
Jilanne Hoffmann (team 100)